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The pie charts and table illustrates the information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the US in the years 1988, 1992, and 2000.

The pie charts and table illustrates the information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the US in the years 1988, 1992, and 2000.
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The table displays data related to the sum of
value
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while
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 the charts illustrate the proportion of imported
fish
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 in the US in 1988, 1992, and 2000. It is clearly seen from the table that the total price of
fish
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 increased over the period. The charts
display
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show
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 that
fish
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 imported from Canada continued to decrease
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 other regions increased and fluctuated. The table shows that from 1988 the total value of imported fisheries steadily increased. Started at $6.57 billion, in 1992, the value grew to $8.52 billion and continued to jump.
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, by 2000, it reached $10.72 billion. The pie charts show that
fish
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 coming from Canada declined throughout the period, with 68%, 34% and 29% in 1988, 1992 and 2000, respectively.
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, imported
fish
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 from China increased from 19% in 1988 and reached 38% by 2000.
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,
fish
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 from other regions fluctuated. Began at 27%, it jumped to 45% in 1992 but dropped to 42% in 2000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "displays" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "jump" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Import origins
  • Total import value
  • Trends in import values
  • Trade patterns
  • Source distribution
  • Import dependency
  • Fluctuations in trade
  • Economic implications
  • Demand and supply dynamics
  • International trade policies
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