The charts below illustrate the market share of different smartphone brands in Russia and the amount imports that occurred in three consecutive years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below illustrate the market share of different

smartphone brands in Russia and the amount imports that

occurred in three consecutive years.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main

features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart shows the
percentage
Russia's
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of Russia's
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smartphone(
samsung
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Samsung
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,
apple
,
xiomi
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Xiaomi
, oppo, vivo and others) market share and how much the country imports from 2019 to 2021.
Overall
,
Samsung
is
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was
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mostly shared and imported in these three years, except
the
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in the
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first half of
the
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apply
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2020, in that time
apple
was shared and imported mostly and
last
4 months of 2019 equal
percetage
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percentage
of the
brand
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brands
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samsung
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Samsung
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and
apple
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Apple
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were shared and imported. Two brands were imported and shared least vivo and oppo,
however
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however,
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there are
unnoticibale
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unnoticeable
difference
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differences
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exists
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apply
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between them. It shows that
the
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in the
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last
4 months of
the
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apply
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2019, Rushia shared and imported 18% of
apple
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Apple
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and
samsung
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Samsung
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,
then
samsung's
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Samsung's
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percentage
had been gradually grown up and
droped
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dropped
4% in the
last
4 months of 2020, as opposed to
apple
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Apple
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significantly increased from 11% to 21%.
However
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However,
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this
drawback did not
last
longer, in the first
qurter
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quarter
year of 2021
samsumng
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Samsung
again reached
to
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apply
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the
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apply
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22% and
apple
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Apple
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went down to 17%.
On the other hand
,
while
oppo sometimes
rise
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rises
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to 1%
than
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more than
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vivo, most of the time
there
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their
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percentage
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percentages
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are similar.
Furthermore
,
xiomi is
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Xiaomi
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always
maintain
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maintains
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medium
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a medium
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growth of
percentage
.
While
the given brands are always in the market
demands
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demand
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, 30 to 40% are
on
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in
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the other brands'
hand
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hands
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.
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