The charts below illustrate the market share of different smartphone brands in Russia and the amount imports that occurred in three consecutive years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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percentage

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Russia's

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smartphone(

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samsung

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apple

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xiomi

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Xiaomi

, oppo, vivo and others) market share and how much the country imports from 2019 to 2021.

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Samsung

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mostly shared and imported in these three years, except

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2020, in that time

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was shared and imported mostly and

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4 months of 2019 equal

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samsung

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and

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were shared and imported. Two brands were imported and shared least vivo and oppo,

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however

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between them. It shows that

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2019, Rushia shared and imported 18% of

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samsung

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then

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samsung's

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percentage

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had been gradually grown up and

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dropped

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4 months of 2020, as opposed to

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significantly increased from 11% to 21%.

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drawback did not

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again reached

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22% and

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went down to 17%.

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to 1%

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vivo, most of the time

there

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their

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percentage

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are similar.

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xiomi is

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medium

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growth of

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the given brands are always in the market

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, 30 to 40% are

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the other brands'

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, last, while".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, samsung, apple with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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4 paragraphs

210 words

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The charts below illustrate the market share of different smartphone brands in Russia and the amount imports that occurred in three consecutive years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Do you agree or disagree with government giving money to artists, rather than health care system?

The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

A rise in the standard of living in a country often only seems to benefit cities rather than rural areas. What problems can this cause? How might these problems be reduced?

Anybody can use a mobile phone to answer the work and mobile phone calls at any time for 7 days a week. Is this development more positive or negative?

Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. Do you agree or disagree?