You successfully passed a job interview. You are expected to start on November 15, but you will not be available on that date. Write a letter to your new boss, explaining your situation, expressing your concern and suggesting a solution

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing

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letter to request an alternate date for joining the company as a Directing manager which is supposed to be on 15th of November

due to

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an uncertain family problem. My name is Himanshu Bhatia and I have recently

hired

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been hired

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for the position of Directing Manager in the sales department and I am supposed to commence my duties on upcoming 15th of

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month but recently my father was diagnosed with first stage cancer and the doctor asked for immediate surgery which is on 16th of November in Mumbai.

Due to

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reason, I won't be able to make it to the office on the 15th as I will be residing in Mumbai from the 11th to the 20th of November to accompany my father. My father is 47 years old and won't be able to get through the process all by himself and there is no one else to look after him. So, I request you to provide me with

anew

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a new

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date for my designation which is preferred to be after the 21st of

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month as I don't want to leave

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role under any circumstances. I apologize for the inconvenience. Looking forward to your reply. Yours faithfully, Himanshu Bhatia

hemanshubhatia540Thu Mar 20 2025

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coherence and cohesion

Consider reorganizing the information for clearer flow, perhaps mentioning the family situation earlier in the letter to provide context for your request.

task achievement

Make sure to proofread for minor spelling errors like 'anew' instead of 'a new'. Such errors can impact clarity.

task achievement

You clearly state your request and provide a valid reason for your unavailability.

suitable writing tone

The tone of the letter is respectful and appropriate for a professional context.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

207 words

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You successfully passed a job interview. You are expected to start on November 15, but you will not be available on that date. Write a letter to your new boss, explaining your situation, expressing your concern and suggesting a solution

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Some people think that manufactures and shopping malls should sell fewer packaged products while others argue that people have the responsibility to buy products with less packaging. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

User Doctors in many countries say that people do not do enough physical exercises. What are the causes of this trend? How can the situation be improved?

With the growing number of populations in cities. Many people are living in small homes that don't have outdoor spaces. Is this a negative or positive development?

In your own opinion, what do you think are the factors that contribute to longevity (living a long time)? List some examples and reasons to support your answer.

Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 per cent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. To what extent do you agree?