The table gives information about the amount of tax collected in five countries for 4 hears between 1975 and 2005.

The table gives information about the amount of tax collected in five countries for 4 hears between 1975 and 2005.
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The table illustrates how much tax was collected in five major
countries
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in the years 1975,1985,1995 and 2005. The
overall
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message from the data seems to be that the highest tax rate was shown by
Sweden
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in all
countries
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with the
USA
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and
Japan
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also
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displaying a notable pattern.
To begin
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with,
Sweden
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and the
USA
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were the
countries
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with the highest proportion.
Sweden
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started with 46% in 1975 ,which saw a gradual increase over the next two decades, reaching 51% in 1995,
while
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the
USA
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collected taxes almost twice as low as the figure for
Sweden
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27.1%. Meanwhile, in the
last
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year,
Sweden
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topped the list at 70.1% compared to other
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,
while
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the
USA
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's statistic remained relatively steady at 27.4%.
Similarly
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, looking at the other three
countries
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, all of them showed similar proportions and alternations.
Korea
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and
Japan
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had similar tax rates of about 15-16% in 1975.
Whereas
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Japan
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grew marginally by 16%,
Korea
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's figure nearly doubled after 10 years. Over the period,
Korea
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,
Japan
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and Turkey continued to increase. In 2005, statistics for
Korea
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and Turkey were 27.3% and 27.4%, respectively.
However
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,
Japan
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’s rate rose slightly higher than both
countries
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, reaching 32.1%
at the end
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of the period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, sweden, usa, japan, korea with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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