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Write a letter in which you forget to return a rental car

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Dear Sir, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I am writing to sincerely apologize for
a
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the
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 delay in returning a rental car to your esteemed “Hertz Agency”.
Last
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 week, I requested a booking of
seven-seater
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the seven-seater
a seven-seater
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 truck from your reputed organization for a
five days
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five-day
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 tour.
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, I received a rental car from Toyota company with registration number CZY9 2010, model 2020 and number plate
was
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ON-T1 from December 5 to December 10, 2024. Unfortunately, on the day of
return
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my return
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, I was just 10 minutes apart from your place when I got a call from my mom about the exigency situation of my
grand father
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grandfather
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. He had been
intruding
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suffering
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 from severe pain in the abdominal part
due to
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 the delay
of
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in
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 the dialysis treatment.
For
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this
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 reason, I prioritized my granddad’s health crisis over the delivery of a vehicle. Once again, I really feel bad for the inconvenience I gave it to you and your other customers. I am aware
about
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of
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 the company’s return policy, penalties or additional charges. I
assures
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 you that
this
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 will never happen again and I will
do
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make
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 prompt payments. Thank you for your time and understanding. Yours faithfully,

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task achievement
Make sure that the letter covers all the details including the intention to return the car as soon as the family emergency is resolved.
task achievement
It might be helpful to clarify if you've already returned the car by the time of writing this letter.
coherence cohesion
Multiple main ideas in one paragraph can make the letter less clear. Consider dividing the paragraph for better readability.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are polite and appropriate for an apology letter.
suitable writing tone
The letter maintains a formal tone throughout which is suitable given the context.
logical structure
The letter logically outlines the sequence of events leading to the delayed return of the car.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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