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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate at fast-food shops between 2003 and 2013.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate at fast-food shops between 2003 and 2013.
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The bar chart provides information about the
percentage
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 of
people
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 consuming fast
food
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 at restaurants in
USA
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the USA
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 between 2003 and 2013.
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, most American
people
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 prefer to eat junk
food
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 once a week or once or twice a month, whilst those who consume it daily have decreased.
According to
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 the given data, the
percentage
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 of
people
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 who consumed fast
food
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 every day decreased significantly from 4% to almost 3% in 2013. In 2003, the majority of
people
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 ate junk
food
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 once a week at 32%, and
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 figure reached 35% in 2006.
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, the number of consumers who ate unhealthy meals once or twice a month increased to 34% in 2013 compared to 30% in 2003.
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, the
percentage
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 of residents who consumed junk
food
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 at least several times a week showed fluctuations. In 2006, it reached the highest
percentage
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 in its history at 20%, before dropping to 16% in 2013. For those committed to eating healthy
food
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 and avoiding restaurants that provide fast
food
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, the
percentage
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 was 5% in 2003. After that, it declined to around 4% and remained steady at that level.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, people, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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