n ct is skwith the increasing prevalence of sedentary lifestyles and unhealthy eating habits, obesity has become a major health problem in many countries. What factors contribute to this issue, and what actions can individuals and governments take to address it?

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There is no denying the fact that in today's
fast-peaced
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society, obesity is
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issue affecting
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and
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causes
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of
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problem.
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negatively.
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, obesity is
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health
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pandemic
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that can be caused by many different factors. In fact, food
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accessibility
and taste consider the main attraction to a lot of people.
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, unhealthy food options have huge
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that can enhance the taste significantly compared to healthy options.
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, these restaurants
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in advertisement and promotion to attract teenagers and young
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for those who wake up late, and they do not want to waste their effort in preparing their
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. In terms of
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,
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government
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might have many possible
solutions
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as offering
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affordable gym enrolment fees
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available to
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society
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vulnerable
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government
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should increase
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health awareness among
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and home
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to those who are suffering from obesity and
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them with possible
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.
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, making
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more desirable healthy meals
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meals
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by investing in chefs to create a valuable menu.
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, many professional chefs offer
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preparation courses for those who are willing to prepare their healthy
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. In conclusion, there are many reasons
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to
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problem in many group categories. It is
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possible to say that
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government
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and people have
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responsibility
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this
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global issue.
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