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The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The pie charts provide
a key information
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key information
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 about the porpuses that led people to go to jobs by car or bicycle. The units are measured in percentages. 
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that Health and fitness and less pollution are
demonestraiting
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demonstrating
 the reasons for cycling to
work
.
In addition
, comfort and distance to
work
are
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apply
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also
taking
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play
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 a huge part in
second
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a second
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 pie chart,
whereas
 other porpuses in both charts are less effective. 
According to
 what is shown, more than half of the first chart
are
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is
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 going to two reasons which are Health and fitness and less pollution they
demonestrait
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demonstrate
 about 60% of the porpuses.
However
, no parking problems
is
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are
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 just 15%, and No Costs and Faster than driving are equal to 30%. In
term
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terms
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 of the reasons for driving to
work
 Comfort has the biggest part
by
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apply
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40%,
while
 distance to
work
 became
secondly
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by
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at
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 21%.
However
, faster
thean
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than
then
cyvcling
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cycling
,
need
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the need
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 to carry things to
work
 and safer than cycling are
taiking
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taking
talking
 39% from the chart.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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