The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.
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The maps illustrate some changes that were made to the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and now.
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, the library design is modernized with the addition of leisure and technology functions. Looking at the first
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in more detail we can see that on the left of the
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, there were three sections, from the top to the bottom, they were the CDs, videos, computer games
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, the
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fiction
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, and the reading
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section
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. On the right of the
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, there were three sections, from the top to the bottom, they were the children's
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section
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, the
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non-fiction
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section
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, and the enquiry desk
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. Regarding the centre area of the
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, an entrance opened at the bottom side that led to a space with tables and chairs. In the recent
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, the CDs, videos, and computer games
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is expanded, adding two sofas, storytelling events, and children's fiction
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while
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all reference
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section
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replaces the
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fiction
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, and the reading
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section
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is replaced by computer
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. On the right of the
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, the children's
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section
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is destroyed to make
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for the lecture
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the
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non-fiction
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has added a new information desk and self-service machines, and the enquiry desk
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is altered by a cafe shop.
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, the entrance is still there,
by contrast
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, tables and chair is removed.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words map, section, adult, books, room with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • layout
  • shelving
  • reading area
  • reference section
  • encyclopedias
  • dictionaries
  • circulation desk
  • transactions
  • digital media
  • computer stations
  • multimedia rooms
  • café area
  • social environment
  • leisure-friendly
  • expanded reading areas
  • user experience
  • comfortable seating
  • children's section
  • engage younger readers
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