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jan---The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

jan---The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table depicts the
number
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 of
research
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students
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 between local and international,
while
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 the pie chart illustrates the percentage of genders among both student categories, from 2001 and 2010 at
Australian
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 universities.
Overall
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, the total
number
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 of international
research
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students
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 increased,
whereas
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 their local counterparts showed a slight decrease,
although
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 the majority of
research
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students
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 in
Australian
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 universities remained locals. Regarding the table, in 2001, the total
number
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 of Australians who studied
research
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 stood at 33,657, which was more than six times the population of overseas
students
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, at 5,192.
However
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, by 2010, the
number
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 of overseas
students
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 rose significantly, reaching 14,593,
while
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 there was a marginal decline in the population of
Australian
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research
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students
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 to 39,488. As for the percentage, in 2001, 87% of
Australian
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 university
students
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 were locals, comprising 44% males and 43% females. Meanwhile, only 13% of non-local
students
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 that year. By 2010, the rate of international increased nearly double to 27%, with both sexes showing growth, led by women.
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, the rate of local men and women
research
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students
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 declined slightly to 35% and 38%, respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, research, students, australian with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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