The graph shows data about the average Saturday sales of two bakeries in London in 2010. Beka

The graph shows data about the average Saturday sales of two bakeries in London in 2010. Beka
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph shows data about the average Saturday sales of two bakeries in London in 2010. Beka
The bar chart represents information about the average Saturday sales of two confectioneries in London in 2010.
Overall
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, we can see Bernie's Buns had more profit-making than
another bakery
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other bakeries
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. Lovely loaves had more sales in products named salad and fresh bread ,
while
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Bernie's buns
was
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a leader in other categories. The bestselling products were doughnuts and cookies , showing around 140 and 120 respectively in Bernie's Buns and nearly 120 and 70 in Lovely loaves . The other three bakeries
such
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as cakes , toasted sandwiches and crisps represented similar trends , illustrating 70 to 100 on cakes , 50 to 80 for sandwiches and 40 to about 80 for crisps in both stores . Fresh bread and salads ,
on the other hand
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, were sold more by Lovely loaves , enumerating for 10 and 50 more trades than another shop. The lowest rate occurred for rolls at both shops , presenting only approximately 20 items per day.

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