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a friend of yours is a fitness instructor. you would like some advice about how to improve your own fitness. write a letter to your friend. in your letter - describe what you do now to keep fit. - explain why you want to improve your fitness. - ask some questions about how to improve your fitness write a least 150 words.

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Dear Jashan, I hope you’re doing well! I know you’re a fitness expert, so I thought I’d reach out for some advice on improving my fitness. Right now, I try to stay active by going for a jog in the morning and doing some basic stretching exercises. I
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 make an effort to eat healthy, but I know there’s always room for improvement. I really want to take my fitness to the next level because I often feel low on energy throughout the day.
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, I’d like to build more strength and endurance, as I find myself getting tired too quickly. Could you suggest a workout routine that would be suitable for me?
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, how important is strength training compared to cardio?
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, do you have any tips for staying motivated and consistent? Looking forward to your advice! Best Regards, Jyoti

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coherence and cohesion
Consider adding a closing sentence that expresses gratitude for the future advice or reiterates your enthusiasm for the friend's response.
task achievement
You might want to include more specific details about your current exercise routine, such as the duration and frequency of your jogging, which would provide more context for your friend.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is friendly and engaging, making it clear that you value your friend's expertise.
coherence and cohesion
The structure of the letter is clear, with a logical progression from your current fitness activities to your motivation for improvement and the questions you have.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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