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The bar chart gives.information about how many Japanese tourists travelled overseas over a 10-year period from1985 to 1995,while the line graph illustrates Australia 's share of Japanese tourist market during the same timefirame

The bar chart gives.information about how many Japanese tourists travelled overseas over a 10-year period from1985 to 1995,while the line graph illustrates Australia 's share of Japanese tourist market during the same timefirame
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The given line chart compares data about how many people per million from Japan travelled to other countries between 1985 and 1995.
Overall
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, it was important that the number of Japanese tourists who travel to
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other
 countries increased over the period of one decade.
According to
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 the diagram, in the beginning, the figure of Japanese who had trips to other areas across the world hit roughly 5;
thereafter
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, their score went up moderately to approximately 11 in 1990.
However
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, they dropped slightly to almost 11.5 in 1991. The graph demonstrates that Japanese tourists travelling abroad rose fractionally and reached just under 12 in 1992, after that they were roughly constant until 1993.
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 their number grew significantly and touched just over 15.5 in 1995.

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