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Describe a place you've visited that made a lasting impression on you.

Out of many trips I have done in recent years, the one which still lives and breathes in my memory is the one to Banff National Park, Alberta, Canada. Banff is the most popular tourist attraction in Canada, known for its richness of mountains and lakes. Located in the series of The Rockies of
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Western North America and acts, it is a perfect place for hikers or skiers in the winter.
This
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 natural asset provides
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 amount of
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revenue
 to its
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province
 by the sheer counts of tourists it
recieves
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receives
 every Summer and Winter. There are many hotels and
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restaurants
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Banff
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 for the guests to rest
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 the view of the Canadian Rockies. The night sky above the natural edges invites
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nunber
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 of dark sky gazers, sometimes allowing them to see galaxies with direct eyes, which may not be the case
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 light
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pollution
 in the cities.
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, That has been
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 journey of
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 which always leaves us
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guilt
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 of not visiting it every year.

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Try to provide more specific examples and elaborate on your experiences in Banff. This could add depth to your essay and make it more engaging.
coherence and cohesion
Consider varying your sentence structures and using more cohesive devices to improve the flow of your essay. This will help the reader follow your ideas more easily.
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The description of Banff as a natural asset and its appeal to tourists is well articulated.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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