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THE CHART BELOW SHOWS THE NUMBER OF HOUSHOLDS IN THE US

THE CHART BELOW SHOWS THE NUMBER OF HOUSHOLDS IN THE US
The graph shows the data of
households
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 in the UK by their annual
income
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 in 2007, 2011,
2015
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and 2015
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. It is noticeable that 15-20
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millions
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million
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of
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apply
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households
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 in
shown
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the shown
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 period have
in
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an
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 average
income
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 50,000-99,999$ per year was steadiness. The number of
households
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 with
annual
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an annual
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income
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 100,000$ or more was over 30
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millions
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million
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 in 2007,
than
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then
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this
Linking Words
 indicator
gradual decrease
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gradually decreased
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 to 28
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millions
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million
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 in 2011 and
increase
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increased
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 to 32
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millions
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million
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 in 2015. Followed by the number of
households
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 with annual
income
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 from 25,000-49,999$ was 26
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millions
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million
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 in 2007, over 30
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millions
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million
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 in 2011 and less than 30
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millions
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million
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 in 2015. The same indicator
noticed
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was noticed
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 with
number
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a number
the number
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 of
households
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which
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whose
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 annual
income
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 is less than 25,000$. The sum up, it is clear from the graph that annual
income
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 in
UK
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the UK
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 has not rapidly
changes
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changed
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 from 2007 to 2015. More than 25
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millions
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million
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households
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 have
income
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 less than 25,000$ per year.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add some linking words.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words households, income, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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