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This graph shows the average temperature in three cities over a two-month period.

This graph shows the average temperature in three cities over a two-month period.
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The line chart provides key information about changes in the average temperatures in three different cities:
Paris
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,
Dubai
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, and
Melbourne
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, during the period shown.
Overall
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, the average
temperature
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 in
Paris
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 saw significant and consistent growth between April and
June
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.
In addition
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, eventually,
Paris
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 became the hottest city, followed by
Dubai
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 which experienced a stable increase,
On the other hand
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,
Melbourne
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's
temperature
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 showed a steady decline. In April,
Paris
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 had the highest
temperature
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 among the three cities at 20
Celsius
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,
whereas
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Melbourne
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 was just below 15
Celsius
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 and
Dubai
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 at 10. Over the next two months,
Melbourne
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's
temperature
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 dropped sharply, reaching around 12
Celsius
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 in May, and recorded 10
Celsius
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 in
June
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, which is considered the lowest
temperature
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 in that month.
However
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, as time went by, the
temperature
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 in
Paris
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 had a sharp increase, peaking just above 30
Celsius
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 in
June
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. In mid-April,
Dubai
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 and
Melbourne
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 had the same
temperature
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, which scored an average of only about 12
Celsius
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, but
then
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 the
temperature
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 in
Dubai
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 kept rising until
June
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, reaching around 16
Celsius
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words paris, dubai, melbourne, temperature, june, celsius with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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