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The graph below shows the average changes in the prices of three metals during 2014

The graph below shows the average changes in the prices of three metals during 2014
The line chart illustrates the average
change
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 in how much copper, nickel, and
zinc
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 cost throughout 2014.
Overall
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, the
price
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 of nickel started with the highest
change
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 among the three but ended up with the lowest,
whereas
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 the
change
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 in
zinc
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prices
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 was the opposite, and copper
prices
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 fluctuated. What is more, the
prices
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 of all three metals dropped in
June
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. It can
also
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 be noticed that the
prices
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 increased at the beginning and the end,
while
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change
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the change
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 in
prices
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 remained stable
during
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from
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 July to September. The
price
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 of nickel showed a dramatic increase
by
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of
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 6% in January, but decreased to -3
percent
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per cent
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 in
June
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, and ended up with
1
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a 1
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% increase in both November and December. Copper
price
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 fluctuated with monthly variations staying within 2%, and the
change
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 was negative by May and
June
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. In January the
price
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 of
zinc
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 was up 1% and saw the most dramatic increase in February with 3%. After a sudden drop in
June
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 (-1%),
zinc
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price
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 kept falling until it rose in November and ended up as the highest
change
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 of all three metals in December by 2%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words change, zinc, price, prices, june with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average prices
  • price changes
  • fluctuations
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • peak
  • drop
  • demand
  • geopolitical issues
  • economic instability
  • market demand
  • correlation
  • industrial demand
  • mining output
  • significant events
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