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The given table provides vital data about the amount of fast food consumed in Melbourne from 2005 to the present time and predictions for the near future.

The given table provides vital data about the amount of fast food consumed in Melbourne from 2005 to the present time and predictions for the near future.
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The table compares the vital figures about the amount of junk food eaten in Melbourne between 2005 to 2025. First of all, people
conusmed
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consumed
consume
 40
units
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 of
hamburger
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hamburgers
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 in 2005
Linking Words
that
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which
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 is
reduce
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reduced
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in
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to
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 present
with
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to
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 38
units
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.
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Although
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However
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, it is predicted that individuals
would
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will
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 eat more than half
units
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of hamburger
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hamburger
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hamburgers
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 in 2025.
Moreover
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, fried chicken was in demand in 2005 and present with 35 and 37
units
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 that would gain extra
units
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 (45
units
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) in the future.
Apart from
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this
Linking Words
,
salad
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the salad
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 was
quiet
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quite
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 unpopular in past years and
rise
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has risen
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 in demand
in
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at
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present
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the present
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 and residents would show very high interest
to eat
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in eating
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 salad (41
units
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) in 2025. Looking at the data of fried rice and noodles, inhabitants had very
less
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little
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 craving for fried rice and noodles
that
Linking Words
is
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apply
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almost
remain
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remained
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same
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the same
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 and would not desire to eat in future.
Overall
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,
hamburger
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hamburgers
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 and fried chicken interacted
more
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with more
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number of
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apply
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masses and it is
antipicated
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anticipated
 that it
would
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will be
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desirable
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be desirable
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 fast food in future,
whereas
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 fried rice and noodles
consumed
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are consumed
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 very less and
would
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will
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 continue
unchange
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change
.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 3 times.
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