Your friend has just won a sizeable amount of money in the lottery. She would like your advice as to how to spend it. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, -congratulate him/her on their win -give practical advice on how to spend the money -advise him/her on benefits/drawbacks associated with large wins

Dear friend I hope
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letter finds you in great health and high spirits. I just heard the incredible news about your lottery win—what a fantastic surprise! Congratulations! I can only imagine how exciting it must be to suddenly have
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a large sum of money at your disposal. You truly deserve it. Now that you’ve received
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unexpected fortune, I’d like to offer some practical suggestions on how to manage it wisely.
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, it would be a good idea to set aside a portion of the money for your future—perhaps by investing in real estate or a long-term savings plan. You could
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consider starting a small business, something you’re passionate about, which could provide you with financial security in the long run.
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, don’t forget to treat yourself and your family to something special. After all, life is meant to be enjoyed. At the same time, I’d like to gently remind you of both the benefits and potential drawbacks of
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a sudden windfall. On one hand, it provides financial freedom and the ability to
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dreams that once seemed out of reach.
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, it can attract unwanted attention or even lead to careless spending. That’s why I’d recommend consulting a financial advisor before making any major decisions. Once again, congratulations! I’m truly happy for you and look forward to hearing how you plan to use your winnings. Warm regards,

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You provided a full response addressing all parts of the task, which is great!
coherence and cohesion
Consider adding a clearer topic sentence in the second paragraph to improve the logical flow between points.
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You've maintained a warm and friendly tone throughout the letter, which is excellent for a personal letter!
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Your congratulatory message and warm closing create a friendly and supportive tone.
coherence and cohesion
Your suggestions on how to spend the money are practical and well-structured.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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