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The charts above show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts above show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
the pie charts compare the
spendings
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spending
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 of the local government on nine different categories between 2010 and 2015.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the most amount of money was spent on education, healthcare and pensions,
whereas
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 the least amount was allocated to transport, culture and leisure, and others in the years shown. Expenditure
on
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in
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 all categories experienced a decline except for transport, defence, pensions and others. In 2010, significant percentages of 24%, 21% and 19% of funds were allocated to education, healthcare and pension, respectively.
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contrast
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 lower figures were spent on interest on borrowing, welfare, culture and leisure and others, which comprised around 11%
all together
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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