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You recently visited a friend who lives in another city. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Thank your friend for the visit Describe what you enjoyed most during the trip Suggest a plan for your next meeting

Dear Sam, I hope you're doing well. Thanks for inviting me to your lovely city Morley to stay during my vacation. I was so thrilled after receiving your invitation. What a great pleasure! First of all, I would like to thank you again for organising
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 fantastic visit as we could enjoy quality time together.
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 it was only a five-day holiday, I felt like it was a long time as we engaged in a lot of different fun activities. The highlight was the picnic in
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Riverside Park
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 because I could enjoy breathtaking views, stunning landscapes, and lush greenery.
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swimming in the river was an incredibly amazing experience I have ever had. Looking at people who were fishing was a great joy.
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, the visit was full of memories! For
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 vacation, Do you fancy coming to my place? So that we can explore my area
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. There are lots of parks and mountains in my location where we can go hiking and walking. I feel you will be so excited to experience
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. Speak soon, Anne

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task achievement
Make sure to include a more personal touch in your thank you. You could mention a specific moment you enjoyed together.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use clearer transitions between your ideas to make the letter flow better. For example, linking activities can help the reader follow along.
suitable writing tone
You have a warm and polite tone throughout the letter, which is great for a personal message.
complete response
You described your enjoyable activities well, giving a clear picture of your experience.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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