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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007,2011 and 2015. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007,2011 and 2015. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The following bar chart illustrates the
number
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 of US
households
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 by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.
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, it can be
obeserved
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observed
 that by categories, the
number
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 of US
households
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 from
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middle
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the middle
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 lower
class
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 (with annual income less than $49,999) and from
higher
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the higher
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class
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 (with annual
earning
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earnings
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 more than $100,000) had been
raising
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rising
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 gradually over time.
Wheras
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Whereas
, the
number
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 of US
households
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 from
middle
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 to higher
class
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 (with annual
earning
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earnings
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 between $50,000
to
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apply
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$99,999) had been staying roughly the same.
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 with, the
number
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 of
middle
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 lower
class
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households
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had
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increased
around
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from around
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 25 to 28
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millions
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million
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 to
both
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apply
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close to 30
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millions
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million
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 from 2007 to 2011, and
then
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 both
falled
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fell
 slightly to roughly 28
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millions
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million
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 in 2015. The
number
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 of
middle
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 to higher
class
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households
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 had been
varies
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varying
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 stably, where
according to
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 the data, the
number
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 of
households
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 making $50,000 to $74,999
were
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was
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 22
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millions
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million
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 in all years, and that of
households
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 making $75,000 to $99,999
were
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apply
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fluctuated between 13 to 15
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millions
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million
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.
Additionally
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, the
number
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 of
higher
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higher-class
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class
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households
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 dropped
slighly
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slightly
 from 29
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millions
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million
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 to 27
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millions
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million
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 between 2007 and 2011, and
then
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 it
rised
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rose
 dramatically to 33
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millions
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million
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 in 2015.
Overall
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, it shows that more
households
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 are moving towards either
higher
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the higher
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class
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,
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apply
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 or
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middle
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the middle
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 to lower
class
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, households, middle, class, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual income
  • income bracket
  • distribution
  • proportion
  • household
  • economy
  • economic recession
  • income inequality
  • income distribution
  • wealth
  • increase/decrease
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • noticeable
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