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Many counries import a large amount of food from other parts of the world. Is this a posistive or negative development?

A range of countries all over the world are heavily reliant on importing a huge amount of food from distant regions.
While
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this
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 practice offers some benefits, I strongly believe that
overall
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 it is a negative development
due to
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 both environmental and agricultural problems that
this
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 development brings. There are so many benefits of importing foodstuffs from other countries , and one obvious advantage of
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 practice is that it increases the variety of foods that are available for consumers.
This
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, in turn, provides an opportunity for the local people to enjoy some seasonal fruits
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 some exotic ones year-round,
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 as strawberries and mangoes in any season, which would be impossible to taste
due to
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 the climate of the country.
In addition
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, diversity not only develops the diet but
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 allows individuals to experience the foods of different cultures through their dishes.
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, importing cuisine from other nations would result in positive progress in countries with limited access to a variety of foods.
However
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, the drawbacks can be significant as importing food to one country could negatively impact the environment ,
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 the local agriculture of the country.
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, transporting cuisine over long distances requires large amounts of fuel, contributing to carbon emissions and climate change.
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, importing fresh vegetables from South America to Europe creates far greater environmental issues than planting them locally.
Secondly
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, a dependence on imported goods can weaken the local farming industries. Local farmers may struggle to compete with cheaper products from abroad, leading to a decline in agricultural jobs and threatening a country’s food economy in times of global crisis. In conclusion,
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 importing exotic fruits and vegetables provides variety and can help to feed a large population in some regions, I think that
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 is generally a negative trend, as
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 trend creates significant issues for the environment and local farmers.

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task response
Give a clear plan at the start. State your view in one line.
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Add more real with small facts or examples to back each point.
coherence
Use less long lines and repeat less. Shorter sentences help.
coherence
The answer shows a clear stance and balanced view of good and bad sides.
structure
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Your opinion

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