Many people believe that by the year 2050, the current system involving both teachers and students in the classroom will no longer exist. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

A lot of people think that the
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where teachers and students interact in a
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will disappear by the year 2050. I believe that there is a real
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in the future, but at the same time,
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support
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will give my point of view. We all know that technology can
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how technology has significantly
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has shown that 8 out of 10 adults
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that the educational
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will no longer exist, most of them
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believe that it will be
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way for a matter of practicality and to save resources. Personally,
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have a different
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prediction. It is undeniable that we have had a lot of changes,
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other things, but
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changes are always related to productivity. In educational fields even having the tools to do it,
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has not been a drastic
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in the way these practices are carried out. Of
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some people decide to educate their children by themself, but the vast majority still believe in the value of in-person classes. Experts point out that the closeness in a classroom with a teacher and the dynamic
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created in the teaching process is a fundamental component that cannot be replaced. In conclusion, the future will definitely continue to create and redefine many things we have today, but as for the current education
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, I don't think it will be completely eliminated since there is an intrinsic value in classroom teaching that cannot be replaced.

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task response
Make your main idea clear in the start. State how much you agree in a clear line.
coherence
Link your ideas with simple words like 'also', 'however', 'for example'.
development
Give 2 or 3 strong points and back them with small facts or facts you know are true.
grammar
Check the grammar and spell words right. Keep to simple and clear forms.
structure
End with a short conclusion that restates your view.
tone
The essay gives a clear view that the current class system may not end now.
organization
There is a basic structure with intro, body, and conclusion.
content
Some good idea of tech change with education.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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