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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans illustrate the alteration of Porth Harbour in the past and present day.
Overall
Linking Words
,it has
multiple
Verb problem
undergone multiple
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significantly changed
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 to become more accessible through the additional dock,and the relocation of fishing boats and marina owned by private yachts.
Also
Linking Words
,there are new recreational areas for hotels and
private
Correct article usage
a private
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beach
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. In the past,the port had only one dock in the north,which
is
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was
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 just below the public
beach
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 heading
to
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apply
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the
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apply
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north.In the present,there is one additional dock serving passenger ferries next to the old one.Slightly to the southwest of the map,there were previously fishing boats,a marina for private yachts and
single
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a single
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 area for showers and toilets. Later,the fishing boats and the shore for private yachts were switched
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 another bathroom was built just above the
pre existing
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pre-existing
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 car park that has
new
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a new
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 road linked to the main road. Moving to the east and southeast,there are cafes and shops next to
lifeboat
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the lifeboat
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which
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, which
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have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
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the
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an
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extend
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extended
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 pathway connecting to the brand new hotel
,
Punctuation problem
;
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the former is a disused castle.So,the public
beach
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is
Wrong verb form
has been
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 changed to a private
beach
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 owned by the hotel.

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structure
Use a clear intro that says what you will compare. Then write 2-3 body parts for past and now. End with a short sum of the plan.
content
Name the main changes in order and add more exact place words like near the north or by the hotel.
language
Check grammar and join ideas with simple link words like and, but, also, then, next.
content
The essay tries to show how it changes from old to new.
features
There are many facts about docks, boats, and new hotels.
structure
Time words like 'In the past' and 'Now' help show change.

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