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The bar graph bellow depicts information about the average hours of unpaid work per week one by people in different categories.

The bar graph bellow depicts information about the average hours of unpaid work per week one by people in different categories.
The bar chart gives information about
people’s
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people
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 who have no or different
number
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numbers
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 of
children
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 average
hours
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 of unpaid
work
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 per week.
Overall
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,
while
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 married
women
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 with
three
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children
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 have the longest
hours
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 of unpaid
work
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, married men have the
least
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fewest
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hours
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 of unpaid
work
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. Looking at married
women
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 in detail, as the
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children
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apply
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number
increase
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increases
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, average working
hours
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 without pay rise per week. Married
women
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 who do not have any
children
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 have 30 working
hours
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 without pay. Married
women
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 with one or two
children
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 have just over 50
hours
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 of unpaid
work
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.
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, married
women
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 with at least
three
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children
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 have 60
hours
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 of unpaid
work
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. Married men who have
both
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neither
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no
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apply
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children
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and
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nor
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 one or two
children
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 have the same average
hours
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with
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, with
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 almost 20
hours
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 of unpaid
works
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work
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. In the category which married men with
three
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 or more
than
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apply
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three
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apply
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children
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 have just above 15 working
hours
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 without pay. In
this
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 group, as the
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children
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apply
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number
grow
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grows
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,
average
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the average
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hours
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 of unpaid
work
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 fall in a week.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words children, hours, work, women, three with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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