Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some
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think that
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for each type of crime can’t be
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for any
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others think that
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can be changed
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motivation and circumstance. I agree that
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should be fixed. Solid
punishment
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for each type of crime can keep the power of the laws. The reason why
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law
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is the red line everyone can’t cross is that
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law
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the law
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has the most serious
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. laws
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essential for
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development.
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, Singapore is called the garden of the world cause
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beautiful city construction and clean environment. What helps them maintain
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status is
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they have the most powerful
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about protecting
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the environment
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. Citizens and tourists could be in prison for dropping litter carelessly. It is
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a severe
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punishment
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that can prevent
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illegal
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rule can apply to other
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like robbery,steal and so on. Deciding
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considering personal
circutances
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circumstances
and motivation, to some extent, is a symbol of humanistic care.
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Law
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system is continuously updating with social development. Some
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can not follow the
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of
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developing
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people
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living in
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a remote
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countryside. They lack of opportunity to learning
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knowledge and usually hunt animals in
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the countryside
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. If they kill a rare animal which is protected by
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, it is a little bit ruthless to punish
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them as
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regulation
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a regulation
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,in a
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widely
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period, there are a few
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who break the
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unconsciously. Most
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know what the
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is and do illegal things thinking that they can
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escape
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punishment
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. Deciding
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differently for other reasons can be some tricky person’s excuses. In conclusion, punishments for each type of crime should be fixed. Everyone is equal before the
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,
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only in
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way can society be stable.

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planning
Plan before you write. Decide what you will say and in what order.
structure
Make a clear intro with your view. Have a body that gives reasons, and a short conclusion.
content
Give 2-3 clear ideas for each side. Then link them to your view.
examples
Include one or two real examples and explain how they show your point.
language
Check spelling and grammar. Use simple words and short sentences.
content
Clear stance is stated early in the essay.
content
There is some good idea about law and rule.
example
An effort is made to use a real place as example.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • fixed punishments
  • consistency
  • predictability
  • deter crime
  • potential offenders
  • streamline
  • judicial process
  • bias
  • corruption
  • complexity
  • human behavior
  • circumstances
  • justice system
  • intent
  • remorse
  • socio-economic background
  • rehabilitate offenders
  • recidivism rates
  • flexible punishment systems
  • inconsistencies
  • perceived injustices
  • public trust
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