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Table below shows the number of motor vehicles per 1000 inhabitants in eight countries between 1990 and 2000

The table below shows the
number
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 of
motor
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vehicles
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per1000
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per 1000
 inhabitants in eight countries between 1990 and 2000. The presented graph illustrates the
number
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 of
motor
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vehicles
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 per 1000 communities in eight countries, including
Bahamas
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the Bahamas
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, Brazil, Cambodia, Chile, Jordan, Luxembourg,
NewZealand
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New Zealand
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, and
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also
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apply
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Romania from 1990 to 2000. Over
all
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All
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, there were a
number
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 of changes over
the10-year
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the 10-year
 periods.
It is clear that
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 the
number
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 of
motor
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vehicles
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dominated
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rose
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 more in rising in Luxembourg in both years. In other
countries
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countries,
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also
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saw
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was
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 a development or decline
,
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;
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in contrast
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, Cambodia remained stable in two years. Observing the diagram in
details
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detail
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, by 1990, the
number
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 of
motor
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vehicles
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 had
depicted
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reached
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 235, but it dropped dramatically in 2000
inBahamas
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Bahamas
, making up 187. In Brazil, 55
motor
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vehicles
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 suited for 1000 inhabitants in 1990.
However
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, it rose significantly to 135 in 2000.Surprisingly, the
number
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 of
vehicles
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 did not change between 1990 and 2000, making up 1. In Chile,
motor
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vehicles
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 demonstrated 68 in 1990, but
it
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 developed sharply, accounting for 88. Turning to Jordan, in 1990, it constituted 50
,
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;
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afterwards, it witnessed a considerable development, representing 157. In Luxembourg, the
number
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 of
vehicles
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 experienced a remarkable ascend over the 10-year
periods
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period
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, peaking at 548 and 728
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, relatively
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relatively
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respectively
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.
Furthermore
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, New Zealand
also
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 ascended, accounting for 531 and 557 from 1990 to 2000.
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, in Romania, 68
motor
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vehicles
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represented
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were represented
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 per 1000 people in 1990
,
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;
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on the contrary
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, it increased rapidly to 80.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, motor, vehicles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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