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the graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different acitivities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020

he
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The
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 line graph provides key information about the
amounts
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number
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 of
participants
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 for five types of activities at one public
center
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centre
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 in
Australian
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the Australian
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 city
Melbourne
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of Melbourne
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 from 2000 to 2020.
the
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The
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 units are measured by number.
Overall
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, it is clear
form
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from
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graph
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the graph
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 that there was
almost
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an almost
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 increase in
number
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the number
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 of
participants
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 in activities.
In addition
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,the film club has the highest numbers,
while
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 the musical performances
has
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have
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 the lowest.
According to
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 what is shown, the film club
actvity
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activity
 has increased slowly from around
at
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apply
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63
participants
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 in 2000 to almost
at
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apply
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67 by 2020. followed by table
tinnis
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tennis
 with
significant
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a significant
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increased
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increase
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 from around 15 to approximately 53
participants
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,
while
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 the martial arts
remind
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remained
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 stable at almost 36 by the end of the period.
in
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In
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 terms of the musical performances
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, who
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who has
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which
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start
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started
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 in
2005
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2005,
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has
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have
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 jumped to around
ti
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apply
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19
participants
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 in 2020,
wherease
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whereas
 the amateur
dramtics
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dramas
were
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have
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decrease
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decreased
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 rapidly in
number
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the number
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 of
participants
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 in 2020.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words participants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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