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Writing Samples
Band 5

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time. Write a letter to your boss. In your letter explain why you want to reduce your working hours say which hours you would like to work describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

Dear Line Manager, I would like to draw your attention to the fact that I am still a student of Lviv National University. I have been studying there for 4 years at the faculty
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 and management" Recently, I have joined your team at the position a procurement Specialist. It is worth saying that working hours took
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 of my time and it was not left for my education. Taking into consideration
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 I want you to reduce my working schedule. Personally, it will be convenient to be in the office from 5 am till 4 pm because my lectures start at 4:30 on the timetable. Please note that we are forced to learn planning budget, communicating with partners and learn to adapt procurement techniques process
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to have consumers our business an impact on the
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new level and improve
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 relationships between all members. Looking forward to your reply,

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Make sure to include a clear introduction stating your request.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that ideas flow logically from one to the next.
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Use a more formal tone, especially in a letter to your boss.
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You clearly mentioned your current role and studies, which is good.
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You expressed a desire to balance work and study, which shows initiative.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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