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The charts illustrate the methods used by international students to book online English courses in Australia, the USA, and Canada in 2009 and 2010

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The charts illustrate the methods used by international students to book online English courses in
Australia
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, the
USA
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, and
Canada
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 in 2009 and 2010.
Overall
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,
Australia
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 and
Canada
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 experienced significant shifts in booking preferences,
while
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 the
USA
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 remained relatively stable across the two years. In
Australia
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, internet booking rose sharply from about a
quarter
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 to nearly two‑fifths, becoming the most common method by 2010.
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 increase was accompanied by a dramatic decline in agent pre‑bookings, which fell from over a
quarter
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 to just above one‑tenth. Arrival and other methods showed only moderate changes.
By contrast
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, the
USA
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 displayed little variation. Each method accounted for roughly a
quarter
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 of bookings in both years, with only minor adjustments,
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 as a slight rise in agent pre‑bookings and a small decline in other methods.
Canada
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,
however
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, saw the most striking transformation. Arrival bookings, which had been dominant at 45% in 2009, dropped to just over a
quarter
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 in 2010. Meanwhile, agent pre‑bookings surged from 22% to 35%, overtaking arrival as the leading method. Internet and other options remained secondary but grew modestly. In summary,
while
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 the
USA
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 maintained a balanced distribution,
Australia
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 shifted strongly toward internet use, and
Canada
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 moved away from arrival bookings in
favor
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 of agents.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, usa, canada, quarter with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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