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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares the total
number
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 of tourists who visited a particular Caribbean
island
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 from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, it is evident that the
visitors
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 staying on cruise ships and on the
island
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 showed upward trends, as did the total
number
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 of
visitors
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, which
also
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 increased throughout the
period
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.
Furthermore
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, the total
number
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 of
visitors
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 experienced the most significant change over the
period
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. At the beginning of the
period
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, the figure for the total
number
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 of
visitors
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 stood at 1
million
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, compared with the figures for
visitors
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 who stayed on cruise ships and on the
island
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. The former
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 increased gradually, reaching approximately 2.45
million
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 in 2015, before levelling off for the next year. From 2016 onward, it rose sharply and peaked at 3.5
million
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at the end
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 of the
period
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.
By contrast
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, the figure for
visitors
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 staying on cruise ships remained the same for one year (2010–2011), before increasing steadily until 2013. Again, it levelled off for the next three years. After experiencing a slight decline, it rose sharply. The
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on the
island
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 fluctuated from 2010 to 2012. From 2012 onward, it grew steadily, reaching 2
million
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 in 2017.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, island, visitors, period, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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