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The chart below gives information about the level of education of Bulgarian people who wanted to go and live in another country in 2002, 2006 and 2008.

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The chart below gives information about the level of education of Bulgarian people who wanted to go and live in another country in 2002, 2006 and 2008.
The bar chart shows information about the
education
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 level of Bulgarians who migrated in 2002.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 secondary
education
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 was the most popular choice among migrants across all years. Meanwhile, primary and lower
education
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 showed significant growth by the end of the period,
whereas
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 higher
education
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 experienced an
overall
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 decline. Looking at the details, secondary
education
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 started at 65% in 2002. It
then
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 dropped slightly to 61% in 2006 and continued to decline to 59% in 2008. For higher
education
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, the figure was 17% in 2002 and climbed to 20% in 2006, but it declined clearly to only 9% in 2008. Turning to primary and lower
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, it stood at 18% in 2002. It rose slightly by 1% in 2006, but in 2008 it grew rapidly to reach 32%

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emigration
  • tertiary education
  • secondary education
  • primary education
  • trend
  • intentions
  • emigrate
  • demographics
  • percentages
  • fluctuation
  • statistics
  • depict
  • overseas
  • significant
  • increase/decrease
  • pattern
  • move abroad
  • educational attainment
  • time frame
  • compare
  • contrast
  • analyze
  • summarize
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