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The chart below gives information about the level of education of Bulgarian people who wanted to go and live in another country in 2002, 2006 and 2008.

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The chart below gives information about the level of education of Bulgarian people who wanted to go and live in another country in 2002, 2006 and 2008.
the bar chart shows information about the
education
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 level of bulgaria who maigrented in 2002 , 2006 and2008
overall
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it is clear that
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 in 2002 secondray
education
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 increased to 65%
in addition
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 in 2006 dropped to 61%
also
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 in 2008 decline to 59% looking at the details higher
education
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 in 2002 was 17%
similarly
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 in 2006 higher
education
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 climed to 20% rised 2 percent it improved than
last
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 2 year
however
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 in 2008 higher
education
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 declined clearly even 9% Turning to the other figures primary and lower
education
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 in 2002 was 18% that normally percented
finally
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 in 2006 rised 1 percent than
last
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 2 years
however
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 in 2008 growed fast to 32%

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, last".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rised" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emigration
  • tertiary education
  • secondary education
  • primary education
  • trend
  • intentions
  • emigrate
  • demographics
  • percentages
  • fluctuation
  • statistics
  • depict
  • overseas
  • significant
  • increase/decrease
  • pattern
  • move abroad
  • educational attainment
  • time frame
  • compare
  • contrast
  • analyze
  • summarize
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