These days, mobile phones and the internet are very important to the ways in which people relate to one another socially. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

The common feature of the
internet
today is that people are more socially involved with each other. Both Mobile phones and
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nternet serve the same purpose. I believe, that the advantages outweigh
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isadvantages. The foremost advantage of mobile phones and
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nternet is that people remain socially connected to each other. No matter if your son or daughter is far away from you, you can always connect with them at any point
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time
. it is a difficult task these days to take
time
out of one's busy schedule and socialize. Mobile phones and
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nternet serve the purpose. No matter where you are, whatever you are doing, you can always get some
time
and socialize with your loved ones. There are different social media
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platforms
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these days who are serving the same purpose. Not only your relatives but you can socialize with people who have
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ame interest as yours. There are few other professional social media platforms as well where you can look for jobs while sitting at home.
On the other hand
, there are some adverse effects of
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nternet as well.
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gap between parents and
children
has
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Children
mostly spend
time
with their
mobilephones
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playing online games or surfing the
internet
while parents are alone and deprived of
children
care. Unlike old times when
children
used to spend more
time
with their parents. To conclude, mobile and
internet
has both pros and cons and are directly
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our lives. I strongly believe that they play a positive role among our lives, as it is totally on us how to make use of it. I believe, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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