Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Even in developed
countries
, a degree of poverty exists.
However
, in many developing
countries
,
this
is a major problem, and the number of poor
people
continues to increase. There are various factors and these need to be addressed.' The
first
issue is influencing world poverty is the current global economic system.
This
reinforces inequality between rich and poor
people
since it allows resources to be distributed unequally amongst
people
.
In addition
, the global economic system can
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the investment strategies of large transna­tional corporations, which often pay their worker's sub-standard wages. Another reason is illiteracy. Many
people
in different
countries
do not have access to education, and
as a result
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do not learn to read or write. They are,
therefore
, precluded from well-paid employment and so cannot improve their living conditions.
For example
,
people
in different
countries
of Africa do not have more resources to study and ultimately there are peoples that are more uneducated. In order to provide help for the world's poor these problems need to be addressed.
Firstly
, the interna­tional community has to establish a fairer economic structure in which the wealth of each country can be shared equitably amongst its
people
.
Moreover
, all
countries
should make it a priority to eradicate illiteracy by providing a comprehensive learning system for all citizens so that everyone is equally capable of improving their living standards. To conclude, it can be said that poverty will probably always exist.
Nevertheless
,
countries
can take actions to reduce
this
by ensuring that there is a fair distribution of wealth amongst the
people
, and by making sure that all
people
have access to education.

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