In some cities, people are choosing cars instead of bicycles, while in other cities riding bikes are replacing cars. Why is the case? Which development do you think is better?

The development of businesses has given rise to the growing tendency of commercial advertising. From my point of view,
this
trend could have both positive and negative influences. It is undoubted that the acceleration of advertising can bring numerous benefits. From the economic perspective, thanks to the large scale expansion of advertisements, more products are sold, leading to the increase in the profit figures of businesses. In order to meet the increasing demand of products of consumers, the manufacturer would expand production, hire more employees and contribute to the decline in the unemployment rate.
In addition
, advertising
have
Suggestion
has
positive effects on people’s feelings. Some advertisements containing funny images and content
is
Suggestion
are
a huge source of entertainment for children. It is advertising that keep people posted
to
Suggestion
for
information (function, model, price) about products and services.
Thus
, customers have more choice to decide which one is suitable for them, feeling satisfied when buying desired products. Despite the great advantages of advertising developments, I insist that it
also
exerts several undesirable impacts.
First
, advertising about soft drinks, fast food, canned food… prompts unhealthy eating, especially when the target customers
is
Suggestion
are
children. In reality, the young generation is heading toward some life-threatening
diseases namely
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diseases, namely
fattigue
temporary loss of strength and energy resulting from hard physical or mental work
fatigue
, cardiovascular, cancer which are caused by the habit of overeating
such
junk foods.
Secondly
, advertising encourages people to purchase what they do not really need. The information about
product
Suggestion
a product
products
on the internet is not censored,
thus
it is unreliable and can mislead the
costumers
someone who pays for goods or services
customers
to buy the products which are of little use to them. In conclusion, according to all above explanations, I claim that the increase of advertisement in modern society has a positive impacts as well as detrimental influences on our life.

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