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School leaver usually go to work or travelling instead of going directly to a university. Do you think this is advantage or disadvantage for their study?

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It is clear that some students nowadays have a tendency to get a temporary job or go on a trip for some time before they start to study at universities after they graduate from their high
school
. While I accept that there are several benefits and drawbacks of
this
 option, I would argue that it is useful to take a gap year to
work
 or
travel
. There will have some disadvantages for choosing to
work
 or
travel
 after high
school
 in some particular extent. Students can face with the shortcoming that their fellows will be promoted soon because they do not choose to
travel
 or
work
.
As a result
, they can become a professional manager or an expert in their field.
Furthermore
, young students who have just finished their studies at high
school
 will not have a lot of money to cover their travelling's costs. That means they will ask for money from their parents, so it is not an advisable option.
However
, several advantages of
this
 decision are undeniable. If students choose to
work
 straight after graduating high
school
, they can get a lot of working experience, which will help them in their future jobs.
For instance
, students can know the ways to communicate with the customers well or handle with clients' complaints better.
In addition
, travelling can bring to young students some valuable experience. If they
travel
 overseas, they will have the best environment to practice their English skills,
this
 can help students a lot in their communication or negotiation in their
work
 because English is the global language over the world. In conclusion, I believe that there are some benefits for students who have a year off to
travel
 or
work
 after graduating from high
school
 prior to going to university
although
 there
also
 will be several notable downsides.
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