Some people say that schools do not do enough to teach young people about health. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people argue that students in schools do not get
adequate teaching
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an adequate teaching
for maintaining their
health
. In my opinion, I agree with
this
statement, regarding some absent of important
health
materials studied in the physical education
subject
, unhealthy tight scheduled lifestyle, and lack of school
health
programmes. At
first
, physical education as the only
health
education
subject
in schools should cover a wide range of
health
aspects,
such
as proper rest time, healthy diets, and
introduction
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the introduction
to
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of
diseases and their causes. If we refer to what
PE
has covered in schools, we can see in most of the schools it mainly talk about sports theories, their rules, and sports practices. While
health
is a combination of many aspects rather than sports only,
therefore
more non-sports materials should be added to the
PE
subject
.
Second
, chances for student to implement a healthy lifestyle while having schools
is
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has been
rarely hard.
For instance
, students are being fulfilled with a lot of assignments and tight schedules. They
are hardly having
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hardly have
have hardly had
their leisure time playing with their friends outside. As
playing
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played
outside is one of the most efficient and practical exercises for them, they should be able to do that regularly. Schools
also
do not have or support healthy diets in their canteens. In my experiences, I had junk food most of the time from my school canteen, since there are plenty of them sold. In
this
case, school authorities should limit food variances that are allowed to sell in their cafeterias.
Furthermore
, they may give more points or price discounts for those students who buy healthy food from their recommended stalls. In conclusion, schools have not optimized their
PE
subjects, environments, and programmes to support a healthy lifestyle for their students. They should add
more healthy
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more health
-related materials
to
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in
their
PE
subject
as well as implement more
health
innovative programs, and reducing overtime schedule for their students.

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