People tend to work longer hours nowadays. Working long hours has a negative effect on themselves their families and the society so working hours should be restricted. Do you agree or disagree?

Working longer hours
is getting
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are getting
more common in today’s society. I personally believe that
this
trend not only has a severe impact on the workers themselves, but
also
on their families and the
community
as a whole.
Therefore
, I totally agree with the idea of limiting working hours. A few decades ago, a person normally worked an average of eight hours per day. Average daily working hours in recent years,
however
, have significantly increased to ten or even fourteen.
This
, in my opinion, adversely affects employees’ health and productivity.
For example
, people who spend longer at
work
are more likely to suffer from various health issues, ranging from fatigue to more serious problems like anxiety disorders or even stroke
.
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.
Failing health leads to more sick leave
,
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,
poor
work
performance and low productivity. My cousin is a case in point. Working nearly twelve hours on a daily basis, he frequently feels exhausted and makes more errors at
work
than he used to. I
also
think that
extended hours
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the extended hours
of
work
has
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have
serious consequences for families and communities
.
Accept space
.
At the family level, busy working schedules prevent people from taking frequent family trips or even just having meals together. Relationships among members are greatly weakened if they cannot make
time
for each other. In terms of
community
life, overworked people do not devote
time
to voluntary activity that brings benefits for their society. My uncle,
for example
, hardly has
time
for local
community
service projects
such
as conservation
work
or working with a charity because he works more than sixty hours per week. In conclusion, I would argue that working
time
should be reduced since the frequency of long working hours exerts an adverse effect on employees, their family bonds and their
community
.
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