In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn.

People argue about huge pay of
few people
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a few people
. Some people opine that it is beneficial for a country, others disagree that disagree that the
government
should introduce limitations on earning. In my opinion, I believe that people who have high salaries, deserve it as whatever a
government
earn comes from them. On the one hand, some people think that the state should impose restrictions
to
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on
payments. For them, it is better to spend more money on needy people rather than spending too much on employees, who can afford to have basic facilities of life.
Furthermore
, a great amount of
government
amount of
government
budget needs to be invested in other sectors of great
significance
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significance, such
such
as education, health and infrastructure, which will benefit everyone.
Moreover
, the
government
of some developing countries cannot manage to provide high salary packages.
For instance
, Pakistan owing to its crippling economy is unable to pay more
to
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for
its professionals because by doing
so they
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so, they
would have to compromise on basic amenities of middle-class people.
On the other hand
, I believe that the
government
ought to give handsome salaries to everyone who deserve it.
Firstly
, whatever a state earn comes from its people. The population of a country
face
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faces
many taxes while purchasing any items, even there is deduction from
salaries
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the salaries
of
employers
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employees
.
This
setup generates enough resources for a
government
.
Secondly
, increasing cost of everything due to
government
policies jeopardize its people and they cannot have
comfortable life
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a comfortable life
with
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less than normal in degree or intensity or amount
low
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payment.
Finally
, with attractive salary, people will be more devoted to their work. They don’t need to indulge in any other business if they have enough financial support from their only job.
Therefore
, they will be more focused on job rather than other methods of income. In
conlusion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
, I believe that deserving people should be rewarded a good salary and
this
will be helpful to make them more loyal to their work.
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