"Prevention is better than cure". Researching and treating diseases is too costly. So it would be better to invest in preventive measure To what extent do you agree?

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There are two competing philosophies in the healthcare and pharma industries. One is to spend enough resources on both

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and the latter is to concentrate mainly on the

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part as it yields long term benefits.

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, in my opinion, while I agree that

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is a better long-term strategy, there must be sufficient expenditure on the healing aspect as well.

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, it would be cost effective as well.

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, there are millions of people who are already suffering from existing ailments, some of which are fatal. If most of the resources are spent on preventive measures for which there could be cheaper alternatives (

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Condoms for HIV),

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millions of patients who are already suffering will meet a certain death.

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, preventive medicine

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needs a backup of treatment. There were instances of failure on the preventive medicine part. Considering

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, to eliminate a disease, wherever possible, a strategy with a combination of

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and

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the work of providing treatment for or attending to someone or something

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should be deployed.

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, it is not cost effective to deploy all the eggs in one basket as well. Invested by organizations or not, the public expenditure would grow exponentially if a

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is not found in time.

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, valuable productive hours of the working class would be lost. Compared to

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, the research spending would be much lesser. To conclude, while preventive medicine is a better way of dealing with a disease in the long run, investing in a

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for it augments the welfare of patients and it will be cheaper as well.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 8.0

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Grammatical Range: 8.0

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Task Achievement: 5.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

preventive measures
incidence of diseases
quality of life
complications and suffering
cost-effective
ongoing expenses
public health education
awareness campaigns
government policies
vaccinations
screenings
healthy lifestyle promotion
healthcare costs
long term benefits
disease prevention
healthcare funding

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"Prevention is better than cure". Researching and treating diseases is too costly. So it would be better to invest in preventive measure To what extent do you agree?

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You had dinner with a family friend. Write a letter to your friend to say What you liked about the dinner Your feelings about their family Invite your friend and their family to your place

Governments give a lot of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been used elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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