Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities are become more isolated. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

It is thought by some that the invent of
internet
enabled people to stay closer while others argue that it increases the isolation in the local communities.
Although
the
internet
allows people to contact their loved ones living in foreign countries instantly,
however I
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however, I
believe that the people’s online addiction reduces their interaction in the neighbourhood. On the one hand, people can communicate with their friends and family members living in any parts of the world with the help of the
internet
.
That is
to say, many social networking applications
allows
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allow
people to send text messages and receive responses, without much wait time, unlike the traditional modes of communication like telegram and post cards.
Moreover
, it enables people to make video calls which
allows
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allow
them to feel their presence, even though they are miles apart.
For instance
, almost 87% of the International students uses Skype video calls to interact with their parents on
daily basis
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a daily basis
as it allows them to stay in touch with their family.
However
, I believe that the
internet’s
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internet
addiction drifts people apart in their community.
On the other hand
, the people’s social interaction within the local community is reduced.
This
is because as people spent more hours in online like chatting with friends in messenger, surfing and playing video games
,
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,
which in turn keeps them indoors and socially inactive with people living around them.
For instance
, a recent research conducted by the London Children Health Services showed that the nearly 67% of children spent their leisure time playing games
in online
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online instead of
instead
of playing with other children outdoors. I am of the view that the
internet
made people to
locked
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lock
up inside their
homes thereby
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homes, thereby
deterring their social presence with others. To conclude, though technology has brought people staying miles away closer,
however I
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however, I
believe that it has stopped their conversation with others.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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