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Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome?

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The most common problem for the countries around the world is related to the environment. But in recent days, many countries around the world has started facing the challenges related to the
population
 and education problems. Being, I am from the
second
 largest populated
country
 India, I could see that India will be facing a huge problem not only to the
environment but
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environment, but
also
 the problems which will
raise
move upward
rise
 because of the
population
 growth in the
next
 ten years. Due to several activities of human being,
environment
Suggestion
the environment
 is getting spoiled. I see that both environmental and
population
 problems are directly
propotional
properly related in size or degree or other measurable characteristics; usually followed by 'to'
proportional
proportionate
. As, the
population
increases eventually
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increases, eventually
 environmental problems get increased as well. In
21st century
Suggestion
the 21st century
, India ranks
second
 in most populated
country
list
Suggestion
lists
. If the
population
 gets increased in the same proportion, sooner India will be the
first
 on the list of most populated
country
 ranking. India will be in the position of facing all the problems like scarcity of water, land, food, employment, education etc.
This
 can be overcome, only when the
awarness
having knowledge of
awareness
 about the over
population
 spreads across each and every
people
Suggestion
person
 in the
country
. Government should take necessary steps to spread the
awarness
having knowledge of
awareness
 via various
medium
Suggestion
mediums
media
such
 as, TV ad's, radio news, newspaper etc. May be, the government can go one step ahead and impose a rule that each family should have not more than two kids.
Also
 the government can explain the advantages of using safety measures during sex in order to avoid
over
too much population
overpopulation
population
. To conclude, there are many issues as mentioned above which will be challenging our
country
 in
next
 ten years due to the over
population
. Only if the government takes necessary action by joining hands along with each
individuals
Suggestion
individual
 in the
country
, the issues can be solved and will not have
major impact
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a major impact
 on our future generations.
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  • Sustainability
  • Ecosystem
  • Renewable resources
  • Urbanization
  • Demographics
  • Healthcare system
  • Pension crisis
  • Curriculum development
  • Digital literacy
  • E-learning platforms
  • Lifelong learning
  • Public policy
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Green technology
  • Population density
  • Generational equity
  • Economic disparity
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