Some people Believe that government money should be spend on important things rather than arts painting and music. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

Whilst
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many
individuals
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individual
thing
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things
that authority money should be
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expended
on essential objects rather
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
artwork like painting and
music
. In my opinion spending on health and education is top priority, but disagree with no funding for the arts. I would discuss both views in
upcoming paragraphs
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the upcoming paragraphs
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To begin
with, there are myriad reasons why I believe that administration
disbure
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disbursement
disburse
on other objects. The
first
and the important case is that good health is necessary for everyone
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these
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These
days, approximately all people suffer from many diseases
such
as, obesity, blood pressure
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Management should
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create
more hospital and fitness Centre so
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masses make fit and healthy
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moreover
in addition
Moreover
, education
play
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plays
a vital role in human life. Educated men and women
help
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helping
in
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with
country economy
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the country's economy
country's economy
and development.
For instance
, if more and more mankind are studying it would be helpful for
nation
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the nation
a nation
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Contrary above to the statement artwork and Melody are
also
part of humanity.
Furthermore
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music art
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music, art
represent
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represents
culture
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a culture
among youth and
next generation
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the next generation
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Traditional
music
of a
country
is more important than the international
music
.
it
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It
is
also
a part the culture of a
country
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For example
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in India" Vande Mataram" song is very special it
show
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shows
country
diversity thanks Council invest money on
music
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also create
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also creates
has also created
new job opportunities
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In addition
painting is a form of Creative human expression.
it
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It
is
show
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showing
emotions of mankind.
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For
this
reason there is no need of any language
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Besides
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it is easy to describe their Nation point of view in international platform. So government should
music
and art. In the conclusion,
although
other objects question for everyone.
However
,
ministry
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the ministry
should
also
encourage people for
music
and our work.
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