some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

we
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We
are living in that era where the different, new and plethora of
competition
is
occur
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occurring
in
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at
every stage of life, between the countries, in schools, in reality shows etc. I think a sense of
competition
in children should be encouraged because it is a time
of
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to
compete rather than
co-operate
work together on a common enterprise of project
cooperate
. To embark, I believe that children must have a sense of
competition
because it is beneficial for their awareness of
competition
since childhood because
competition
will
also
be increasing with their age,
for example
, when they are in the primary school, the
competition
of education and skills are
also
there, so they require some knowledge for
handle
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handling
it.
Furthermore if
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Furthermore, if
we take an example of countries, there is a huge amount of battle between the countries
such
as the battle of army strength,
environmnent
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
, economy etc. In
film industry
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the film industry
, a new and talented actors and actresses are increasing day by day. In cricket, a plenty of new cricketers are coming, and they are showing their skills and performances, so it is paramount for encouragement of
competition
to
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for
children because it is easy for them to handle every situation in life and in every difficult circumstances they will find some solutions.
however
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However
, it
is generally believe
Suggestion
is generally believed
that children who are taught to
co-operate
work together on a common enterprise of project
cooperate
rather than compete become more useful adults because some people believe in peace, so they have a feeling of co-operate in every situation and their way of thinking is different, they think every work is done through silently rather than
conflict but
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conflict, but
I disagree with them because in my opinion,
competition
should be occur because by
this
, everyone
get
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gets
an opportunity to enhance their skills and knowledge. They can easily overcome failures. To sum up,
competition
is a part of our life, so ever
y childr
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child
en must have a sense of
competition
because it is fruitful and sometimes it is adventurous to have some type of competitions
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