The number of old people around the world is increasing dramatically. Is this a positive development?

With the advancement in the field of health sector, there has been an
increase
in the average lifespan of homo sapiens. Whether the impact of
this
increase
in percentage of living old individuals, is beneficial or harmful is a contentious issue.
This
essay will emphasize on the views of both sides. Elders are the building blocks of a society
;
Accept space
;
their experiences in life
helps
Suggestion
help
others to shape their future.
Firstly
, elders of the family look after the grandkids, enabling their parents to schedule their day more efficiently. The care they provide is far better than the attention given in kindergartens and preschools, and
also
, they charge only love.
Secondly
, some of the retirees provide helpful services in the community.
For instance
, they voluntarily feed the homeless in soup kitchens, or drive handicapped or older people to their hospital appointments and church sessions.
Thus
, their contribution to society is undeniable.
However
, despite the above mentioned facts, many believe that there
are
Suggestion
is
a plethora of negative impacts of
this
increase
.
To begin
with, the rising number of retired people is contributing to the increasing financial burden on the
tax-paying
not exempt from paying taxes
taxpaying
working class.
For instance
, according to the data of the National Health Sector of
U
The objective case of we, the persons speaking
us
.K,
last
year geriatrics comprised more than three fourth of the total recorded visits to the General Physician’s clinic.
Furthermore
, increasing lifespan means low mortality, which leads to expansion of the population
.
Accept space
.
The
increase
in necessities of
this
bustling
population
Accept comma addition
population, thus
thus
, put a strain on the existing resources,
therefore
, raising load on the biosphere. In conclusion, the dramatic
increase
in elder population has both pros and cons related to it. But, with better management by government and local communities to find ways to occupy these extra helping hands, may lead to better results in future.
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