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Some people believe that we cannot learn anything from the past for our life today, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information to understand human's life. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Certain people believe that we have nothing to gain from the
life
 of earlier generations because we are scientifically more advanced than them.
In contrast
, others think there are lots of morals to learn from stories of the past and I agree with them. Our recent better understanding of the universe has made some persons to disregard history. They believe that since we have been able to disprove many olden beliefs, the past is not worth learning from.
For instance
, it is now known that it is mosquito bite that causes malaria and not bad air as was previously accepted.
Thus
, for them, our scientific breakthroughs are evidences that we are more sound and rational than older generations. They claim it will be a waste of time to refer back to history and that it will even cause
intellectual setback
Suggestion
an intellectual setback
intellectual setbacks
 to our advancing society.
However
, another set of individuals
think
Suggestion
thinks
 that there is more to
life
 than science. I agree with them. Their opinion is that good conduct is the backbone of every community and
therefore
 should be given preference.
Thus
, they use
life
 stories of their forefathers to instill discipline in their members.
For example
, in most villages, children are gathered at night and told stories of their ancestors depicting the reward of
hardwork
Suggestion
hard work
. The aim is to urge these kids to work hard. A study, conducted by Ondo state university final year psychology students in 2013 revealed that these children had more social acceptable character than their counterparts. In conclusion, though we are scientifically better than our fathers, I still support the idea that we
hat
have or possess, either in a concrete or an abstract sense
had
 lots of good
life
 values to learn from their
life
 experiences.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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