Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind the bar. To what extent do you agree?

The prisons were created way back in the ancient time in order to punish people who committed
crime
Suggestion
the crime
crimes
a crime
. The majority of the people believe that, individuals who are committed minor crimes
such
as thieves and blackmailing etc.
should
Suggestion
Should
be punished in term of
community
work
on
unpaid basis
Suggestion
an unpaid basis
. I
am partly agree
Suggestion
partly agree
on the condition unpaid
work
because, even though criminals have families and they need sort of some money to survive. Most of the people are confident that it is a better punishment idea for criminals by doing
community
unpaid
work
.
This
will definitely make them aware about an importance of the legal constitutions as well as social values. They will feel respected because, it’s a better way of punishment as
compare
Suggestion
comparable
to
prison sentence
Suggestion
a prison sentence
prison sentences
for the particular period of time.
For instance
, in most of the criminal
cases criminal
Accept comma addition
cases, criminal
commit crime again because, they will not get proper an employment,
general public
Suggestion
the general public
will not treat them respectfully and many more. But, with
this
different approach definitely they will think before committing crime again.
On the other hand
, the prisoner’s
community
work
should be paid or partially paid because criminals
also
have families. Their full or
partially
Suggestion
partial
paid
work
will help them to support their family finances to survive in real scenarios.
For example
, if criminal are getting paid for their
work
during that punishment period, they will definitely start working
instead
of thinking about wrongs ways of earning money. In conclusion, it will be a great idea to punish criminals by doing
community
work
rather than prisoning.
Nevertheless
, it should be partially or fully paid in order to support their family.

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