Small shops in towns and villages are closing and replaced by big stores. Explain your opinion. Do you think it is good or bad?

Mega shopping malls have significantly acquired
large portion
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a large portion
of the market share from small retailers due to the fact that they were unable to compete with them and ultimately had shut down their businesses. I personally believe that it is a positive step toward transformation of old fashioned style of doing business to modern one for the reason that it provides comfortability to buyers along with allowing them to get goods much
more cheaper
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cheaper
than the smaller stores.
Firstly
, purchasers prefer buying their needed items from on big
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
Center
rather than visiting different small stores
for
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of
every
types
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type
of the needed products because all items are easily accessible and can be found at one place.
In addition
, it provides them comforts, saves their time, and enable them to enjoy their moment while walking around those magnificently engineered malls. To illustrate, in 2016 it was reported by Forbes that Dubai Mall in Dubai city had allowed the residents to save almost 50% lesser time by buying them from there than outside small shops. It says that it
is cause
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has caused
efficiency in day to day life of the people.
Moreover
,
lets
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let's
consider the financial aspects of it, the fixed cost of the goods is directly correlated with the number of items sold by the suppliers due to economies of scale,
thus
as the numbers of items sold upturns,
unit cost decline
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the unit cost decline
which enables business to offer
same goods
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the same goods
at
much lower price
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a much lower price
.
Likewise
, the large stores are in good position to take advantage the economies of scale because more people are willing to visit big malls due to different reasons. .
For instance
, the success behind offering best offer in Kabul City
center
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Center
centre
is paying less for finished goods than
the small
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smaller
retailers; it means that these places provide people an opportunity to save
cost
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costs
. In conclusion, emerge of enormous shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
hugely affected local business to an extent that
majority
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the majority
a majority
of them are unable to survive and compete with them. In my view, it is a positive development for the society both financially and comfortably.
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