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Recently, it is common for people to not know about their neighbors. What are the reasons of this problem? And how to solve this problem?

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Nowadays, people know less about their
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
. The basic reason of
this
 issue
are
Suggestion
is
 many and there are certain solutions to tackle
this
 negative development. To start with, people become less social especially in the
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
, owing to the excessive workaholic environment.
This
 is because in the modern era, individuals are striving hard for earning money, in order to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 daily living expenses and are unable to be social.
For example
, from the
last
 two decades poverty level has increased and people are working more as compared to before that period. Resultantly, people have become more restricted to work and are unable to meet frequently
to
Suggestion
with
 their
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
 and other members of the
society
. Another reason is that, people used to spend their spare
time
 on social media
such
 as Facebook, Twitter, and Instagram. They have become addicted of using
such
 sites in even their busy
time
.
Therefore
, they avoid meeting with people in their surroundings in spare
time
. Admittedly, there are certain solutions to counter
this
 fast growing problem in the
society
.
To begin
 with, there should be a social awareness message to people for remaining socially active in the
society
.
Such
 message could bring a change in
people
Suggestion
peoples'
peoples
 minds to think about engaging in the
society
, especially in the
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
 and knowing the importance of social engagement.
Also
, there should be less spending hours in front of
computer
Suggestion
a computer
 or television, in order to remain socially more active, which means people could communicate with their
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
.
Furthermore
,
people ought to not
Suggestion
people ought not to
 compromise their social life by their work life.
This
 in turn will be a way of spending more
time
 with the people in the
society
. To conclude, owing to the long working hours and spending excessive
time
 using
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 are the reasons people know less about their
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
; meanwhile, message regarding becoming social, spending limited
time
 in using
internet
Suggestion
the internet
, and managing wisely their work and social life are the ways of solving
this
 problem.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • community engagement
  • social isolation
  • neighborhood watch
  • local initiatives
  • virtual interaction
  • privacy concerns
  • resident mobility
  • technological advancements
  • social media influence
  • work-life balance
  • busy personal schedules
  • community events
  • local residents
  • social interaction
  • community ties
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